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When I was young, around 10 years old, the first book I became interested in reading was My Sweet Orang Tree.

The main character's name in Jeje who is a little boy and overcomes his difficult circumstances.

I can't remember the story exactly but I was impressed from his heartbreaking story. I cried my eyes out at that time. 

I learned to have a positive mind in any environment. 

Affter that, I enjoyed reading romance novels and detective stories.

I spent a time for my sentimental puberty with them. 

It helped me raise my kids and I used to read them bedtime stories every night.

When I didn't read them books, they didn't sleep.

 

Please correct these sentences and make them better.

I don't get hurt so I want better expressions.

Thank you so much.~~^^

 

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    0001_Rach 2023.02.19 21:42

    Hi~
     

    This is Teacher Rach~ Here are your corrections:

     

    When I was young, around 10 years old, the first book I became interested in reading was My Sweet Orang Tree.

    ==>  When I was young, around 10 years old, the first book I became interested in reading was "My Sweet Orange Tree."

    The main character's name in Jeje who is a little boy and overcomes his difficult circumstances.

    ==> The main character's name is Jeje who is a little boy who overcomes his difficult circumstances.

    I can't remember the story exactly but I was impressed from his heartbreaking story. I cried my eyes out at that time. 

    ==> I can't remember the story exactly but I was impressed by his heartbreaking story. I cried my eyes out at that time. 

    I learned to have a positive mind in any environment. 

    Affter that, I enjoyed reading romance novels and detective stories.

    ==> After that, I enjoyed reading romance novels and detective stories.

    I spent a time for my sentimental puberty with them. 

    ==> I spent a part of my sentimental puberty on them. 

    It helped me raise my kids and I used to read them bedtime stories every night.

    When I didn't read them books, they didn't sleep.

     

     

    Wow! This is amazing~! You've improved a lot and you used a lot of great expressions in your writing, Keep up the good work! Please take note of these errors and some suggested expressions:

     

    *verbs: Use 'is' instead of 'in' to connect your subject to the noun complement in your sentence.

    *phrasal verb: the right phrase is 'to be impressed by' and 'spend on'

    *vocabulary: 'part' is better to use than 'time' in your sentence to talk about a period during your puberty

    *spelling: double-check the spelling of some words like 'orange'  and 'after'.

     

    I hope the suggestions will help! Keep posting~~

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    im_fairyofshampoo 2023.02.20 19:59
    Oh.. spelling.... I'm sorry and thanks for your kind words. I am encouraged.~~^^

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