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2022.11.06 20:34

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I found an interesting cafe.

This cafe is mamed after cats.

I think this cat is the owner.

It is a shared house with a laundromat on the first floor.

On the side, there is a small book shop.

Sudents post lists of good restarants.

I'll study with coffee upstairs.

On the note, I put stickers I just got.

For me, it's a time of healing.

Sudenly, I remember how I felt when I was in my 20s.

It was a time when I had so many worries.  ^^

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    0001_Rach 2022.11.07 08:15

    Hi~
     

    This is Teacher Rach~ Here are your corrections:

     

    I found an interesting cafe.

    This cafe is mamed after cats.

    ==> This cafe is named after cats.

    I think this cat is the owner.

    ==> I think one of the cats in the picture is the owner.

    OR   I think the cat in the cafe is the owner.

    It is a shared house with a laundromat on the first floor.

    ==> The cafe is a shared house with a laundromat on the first floor.

    On the side, there is a small book shop.

    ==> On the side, there is a small bookshop.

    Sudents post lists of good restarants.

    ==> Students post lists of good restaurants.

    I'll study with coffee upstairs.

    On the note, I put stickers I just got.

    For me, it's a time of healing.

    Sudenly, I remember how I felt when I was in my 20s.

    ==> Suddenly, I remember how I felt when I was in my 20s.

    It was a time when I had so many worries.  ^^

     

    Well done~! You wrote a longer one this time and added more descriptions. Keep it up! Please take note of these errors:

    *spelling: Please always double-check your final draft for spelling errors like 'named', 'restaurants', bookshop', 'students', and 'suddenly'.

    *cohesion: 'Cohesion' is very important in writing because you use vocabulary and grammar to make connections between ideas so there will be a smooth flow in your writing and help make it clear and more comprehensible to readers.

    ex: I think this cat is the owner. (It's talking about a cat or the cafe owner.)

    It is a shared house with a laundromat on the first floor. (It's talking about the cafe.)

    - These sentences are related but they seem to talk about different things. 


    I hope the suggestions will help! Keep posting~~


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