Speaking: You sounded comfortable when speaking in English as long as the topic is familiar to you. There were times when you had a hard time expressing what you want to say but you still tried to speak and didn't give up. Keep that up! More practice will eventually help you be more able to say what's on your mind.

Grammar: Please take note of your errors:

You said: My mom's kimchi stew is used to me.
Correct: I'm used to my mom's kimchi stew.
 

You said: I hope my dad cooking stop.
Correct: I hope my dad stops cooking

You said: in holiday

Correct: on holidays

Vocabulary: Please take note of these words and phrases:

workaholic

boss

good self-control

midnight snack

chew carefully

better for the stomach

French fries

salt level

crispiness

porridge 

convenient

home-cooked meals

Pronunciation: Please take note of these words and how to pronounce them:

*jealous /jeh-luhs/

​​Overall Feedback: There are some words and phrases that you need to take note of so you'll know which better expressions to use in your sentences. Don't worry too much about your difficulty to express your thoughts~ You will be able to improve once you get used to speaking and learn more vocabulary~